Sunday, February 27, 2011

Fairview Part Two

Started Book Two of my Fairview series today.  It felt strange, but good to get away from Mels and all her drama. 

In class I learned about how publishers sometimes only read the first line of a manuscript before deciding whether to toss or keep reading.  So if you can imagine, I wrote and rewrote the first sentence all day.

This is what I got:

"Tall caramel macchiato for Matahar-- JANE!"  The barrista shouted.

What do you think?  Would you keep reading?

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